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Elise sunk down with the rest of the ship, dragged down by her brass innards. Wordlessly, she begged her creator to let go, but she knew he wouldn't. He'd brought her to life out of love, and he would do anything to save her. Elise watched him struggle and drown, her perfect sculpted face impassive while her mind whirred and clicked behind it in turmoil.

She hit the seabed and was swallowed in a cloud of mud as the carcass of the ship broke apart around her. Over the ages her gears seized up and her alabaster curves effervesced and decayed, macerated by the sea. Still her soul lingered on. Aphrodite had infused life into her copper heart, and it would never stop now. Never.

She lay in the Lethe for the longest time, while the lives of men went on oblivious above. When she was dredged up, she was no longer recognisable as an entity, let alone the paragon of femininity she had once been. She was limbless and worn, a sentient pebble. They held her in their hands and probed her jammed up motors. They scraped away the rust and puzzled over her mechanisms. They called her Antikythera and hypothesised her to be some kind of primitive tellurion. Some time later she found herself in a glass case, on display in some kind of temple. People crowded to see her, but it wasn't the same as it had been when she was new. They looked with awe and amazement, but not with adoration.

"Unprecedented sophistication," they said. "One of the great mysteries of the ancient world."

She prayed for a body but received no answer. The gods had died while she slept.
Day 30 of FFM 2012. I'm quite proud that this is the only time I've really had trouble this year. It's been a good July!
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Student Writer
I find myself returning often to this piece, wishing to God I had thought of it first. Alas, I did not.
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joe-wright Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012   General Artist
Rest assured I feel like that a lot too, sometimes it seems like there's not nearly enough ideas to go around! It's really about the execution I suppose, as long as you can find new things to say about an old subject then it's still just as valid.
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Student Writer
That's always true I suppose. Thank you for the encouragement!
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Sigma-Echo-Seven Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2012  Student Writer
God, so much packed into just one short story! Truly marvelous work (with adoration included). ;)
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joe-wright Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2012   General Artist
Thank you, that's a lovely compliment! =)
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012   Writer
:iconcongratulationplz: ..on the DLD Pick of the Day! This piece has many layers, 'wonder full' to read and ponder. Thank you. :+fav:
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joe-wright Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012   General Artist
Thanks! It was really nice to come home to! =)
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2012   Writer
Yes, it is. You're very welcome. :)
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neurotype Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012
:ohnoes: I saw this mechanism, too! And it is all barely pieced together and stuff, a real bummer.

I would love to see a way for this to play out. Maybe she finds new gods?
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joe-wright Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012   General Artist
Yeah, she's not in a great state of repair these days, they've made some beautiful replicas though!
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neurotype Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012
Do any of them work? I just saw the computery one at the National Museum :o
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joe-wright Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012   General Artist
Yeah, they've extrapolated from what they could see and built a kind of astral calendar or something. Not as awesome as a magic robot person, but not too shabby for something thousands of years old!
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neurotype Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012
For sure ;p
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012
fascinating. there's a lot going on in such a short piece, and you handled it well with interesting language and good pacing. well deserved DLD and a great pick of the day.
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joe-wright Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012   General Artist
Thank you very much! This comment made me happy, I was worrying about those very things today in regard to a big project, so reading that helped my confidence a lot. =)
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glossolalias Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012
you're welcome (:
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Sep 7, 2012
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) and has been selected as our “Pick of the Day”. It is featured in a news article here: [link] and on our main page.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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joe-wright Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2012   General Artist
Thank youuuuu! =D
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DamonWakes Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012  Student Writer
This could have been another silly joke, but as it is it really makes you think. As much as I love your Parahuman Investigation stories, it was great to see something like this.
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joe-wright Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2012   General Artist
Thanks! There were a lot of golems this year, yours included! =p
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kitiaramajere Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012
I really like that you wrote one about this... much more interesting than anything I thought of!
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joe-wright Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012   General Artist
It's what comes of spending so much time on wikipedia. I remember actually being kind of freaked out by the Antikythera mechanism when I first heard about it, it's so bizarre that something so complex existed so long ago, and you can bet it wasn't the only thing. It makes you wonder how we managed to forget so much!
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kitiaramajere Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2012
I know, I saw it on Gizmag, I think. That kind of thing fascinates me!
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NamelessShe Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Your pieces are always filled with great images and interesting scenarios. I enjoyed this!

Favorite line (hard to pick, but I finally settled on one)--->She was limbless and worn, a sentient pebble. And I love the ending.
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joe-wright Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012   General Artist
Thanks! The real-life Antikythera mechanism is super weird, and the wikipedia page suggests they had lifelike looking motorised statues thousands of years ago, it's really interesting stuff. =)
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NamelessShe Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Very cool! And the modern world likes to pretend we're the first to come up with that kind of stuff.
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